Monday, April 6, 2009

So Far Away

Beautiful Joanna lays naked on the beach, sipping her Pina-colada from the crystal glass. Sky is blue and the water green. Waves come and go, and theirs’ is the only sound to be heard; cool breeze blows silently.

Ain’t this lovely, Sammy?” Joanna chirps as she takes the last sip. She lets the empty glass roll over by her side.

“Sure is, honey” comes the voice from between her toes. Sam continues to pedicure her.

“I wonder how far away I am from my natural self, the pure untouched soul, once born with only the basic instincts. I so wish I would know” her drunken words dream aloud.

“Ouch..SAMMYY!!!!”, she squeaked as Sammy pulled her toes, not gently at all. He pauses to think for a moment.

“You’re hurting me, Ouch …Ouch!! Stop it you monster, will you!! ” are Joanna’s angry pleas as Sam twists her feet.

Sam waits for less than a second this time and then he pricks the pedicure knife in her long pink toe.

EEAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHH” Joanna screams, louder than an animal, at the top of her voice as Sam leaps forward to shut her mouth.

SHHHHHhhh” Sam looks in her eyes and slowly slides his hand away from her mouth.

Joanna watches dumbstruck as tears roll down on her sunscreen covered cheeks. Her toe is bleeding.

Sam picks up the crystal glass and let Joanna’s blood drip into it, drop by drop. Bleeding stops after a while, sobbing too.

Sam shows her the quarter filled glass. Red looks good in crystal.

This far away”

Joanna smiles and pulls the towel on.

33 comments:

Sanjay said...

Black. You should write fiction more often.

Preeti said...

ewww .... U scared me ...

very well written ..

sammythewizzy said...

:O This Sammy is definitely not me!! I would never ever do that :O :O ...

Lol.. but still, isn't poking between fingernails/toenails be excruciatingly painful? (they use that in interrogation of POWs) Why would sammy do that?

Arnab Majumdar said...

Dude, that was fantastic! Gave me goosebumps when I read it man... amazing stuff!

I wonder what triggered the chain of thoughts for this one...

BrownPhantom said...

@Preeti,
Really glad tht you liked it.
And what's happeneing with your Goa trip ? :)

@Sanjay,
Point taken sir.

BrownPhantom said...

@Sammy,
:).
Don't know yaar. Ye angrej log kuch bhi karte rahte hain. IF the characters wud have been Sameer & Jyoti, then it wud have sounded quite less credible :).

@Arnab,
Thanks dude. YOu are always very kind with your words :).

Vinnie said...

Brown :)

a quarter filled glass ??? man, thats so awful!
moral: never ask philosophical questions during pedicure or any cure requiring knife/needles, etc.

Winnie the poohi said...

Ah twisted!! I like it :D :D

Kadambari said...

Wicked! I thought he was going to kill her! :P

Brilliant post!

Richa said...

It was sort of very earthy & raw. I found it to be sexy too. There was an erotic intimacy between the two. Maybe I am weird .

Scattered Thoughts... said...

uhh.. I lost it completely.. may be I need more senses to understand it.. :(

BrownPhantom said...

@Vinnie, Winnie, Richa,Scattered and Kadambari,
Thanks for stopping by.
Need to catch up with ur blogs; running extremely busy these days :).

Me said...

Erm yeah..yeah..if pain n realization be the binding factor..then i would run for my life b4 befriending Sammy or asking Obscure soul searching Qs:P

BrownPhantom said...

@Me,
Well, all she had to do was to yell like an animal when he pulled her toes. The next two steps need not have happened in that case.
Sammy had to push her to the limit when she would react instinctively.
:).
Yes Sammy was weird enuff to drive home the point in his ways and such company should be avoided if you are not the Joanna-kind.
It's a trade off :).

Me said...

hmm..sometimes u need a prick for the light to dawn.. :P
red be it then..:)

Nikki said...

Now why would a bf/hubby do that? Sheesh!

Interesting tho!

BrownPhantom said...

@Nikki,
One might think of reasonable/unreasonable explanations. All i can tell u is that Sam was definitely not a "hubby' :).
Thanks for dropping by.

preposterous girl said...

huh!! scary stuff..
u literally painted the scene with ur words..

Deepika Gupta said...

you write really very well.... you try your hand on writing novels :)

BrownPhantom said...

@Deepika & Preposterous Girl (funny),

Thanks a lot for your encouraging comments. Can't help but gloat :).

kanika said...

I guess explaining simplest of the things in not-so-simple ways holds its own charm. Like this stunning post...b'coz frankly, it stunned me at first go. ;)

nice writing!

BrownPhantom said...

@Kanika,
Thanks :).

TinTin said...

yeh jaonna maregi ek din..

you should write more of it.. may be continue on these characters/story..

sammy/joanna - badiya hai...yeh naame kahan se laate ho yaar.

muthu said...

the idea was brilliant dude.....

BrownPhantom said...

@Muthu,
Thanks man.

hardik said...

Great post..

BrownPhantom said...

Hardik, Thanks for dropping by . How many blogs do u have :).

Sunrita said...

They say, "when no 2 people look at your creation in the same way, it means you r more than - 'just good' at your creation"...
Need I say more? :)
Kudos man..

Meghana Naidu said...

Somehow this story feels like a piece from a much bigger story.. i would love to read more about these characters! pscychoanalysis maybe? they intrigue me ;)

BrownPhantom said...

Thanks Meghna & Sunrita :).

Nicky said...

Ohkay! That was psycho kinds. Some kind of sadism thing?! O.O

Choco said...

Eeewwww & wow!!
They seem sick and you write amazing stories! :)

tarjeta r4 sdhc said...

u should write fiction more often.
that was fantastic! Gave me goosebumps when I read it man... amazing stuff!